A nurse appeared in the doorway. “Johnny,” she said quietly, “your mother’s here to see you.”
Johnny opened his eyes. At first they were wide with surprise, then they darkened. “I don’t want to see her,” he said firmly.
“She’s your mother.”
“I said I don’t want to see her.” His voice was rising. “She’s probably come to tell me about all the trouble I’m causing her and about how glad her and the old man’ll be when I’m dead. Well, tell her to leave me alone. For once” –his voice broke- “for once just to leave me alone.” He was struggling to sit up, but he suddenly gasped, went whiter than the pillowcase, and passed out cold.
The nurse hurried me out the door. “I was afraid of something like this if he saw anyone.”
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You are writing part of a narrative, not a script. Sentences, punctuation, and paragraphs should appear the way it would in a book. Use the book or passage above as an example. Pay special attention to the dialogue and how the author starts a new paragraph each time she changes speakers.
FCA#1 Narrative is written in the 3rd person. (20 pts) (Limited or omniscient- pick one and stick with it, but you need to reveal the thoughts of at least one character.)
FCA#2: Correct punctuation and paragraphing. (20 pts)
FCA#3: Narrative is between 130-150 words (counted) (60 pts)